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http://darstellen.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] darstellen.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] lindenharp 2010-02-06 02:04 pm (UTC)

Your use of italics is fascinating -- it conveys the echoing quality of Ten's own voice in his head, giving the first and last lines a wonderful consistency: the conclusion is the logical development of the premise. It is boggling how well you develop a psychological logic. The reader is shocked, gripped, amazed.


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